Broken Boner

To start, the writing is noticeably rough. While I understand the story was translated into English, the result reads more like a first draft by someone still learning the language than an acceptable adaptation.

Example: "The thing is that we were both super dumb, we stole food and then Zac started flirting with me and I was super dumb too."

I’m left with the impression that this character is childlike in their thinking, though I can’t tell whether that’s intentional or a reflection of the writer’s own limitations. There are many grammatical issues like this throughout the story, including typos.

The story quickly veers into surreal territory and becomes difficult to make sense of. The main character goes from being on the brink of suicide to randomly meeting the lead of their favorite band, kissing them on the spot, performing on stage with the band, then shortly after, hooking up and doing hard drugs together. It’s a chaotic whirlwind that feels more like a fever dream than a coherent narrative. What follows is more extreme, and it all feels like it came out of the mind of a teenager.

The story is paired with an inconsistent art style, at times chibi and cartoonish, at other times more detailed and realistic. This tonal shift can be jarring, especially when it’s not clearly tied to narrative purpose.

The main character’s scars frequently disappear depending on the illustration. This is very distracting, especially when those scars are meant to carry emotional and narrative weight.

The imagery shown through the in-story app is presumably meant to represent photos taken by the character’s phone, yet the angles depicted would be impossible to achieve.

I’m being this critical because the surrounding praise creates a misleading impression, one that suggests this work is flawless, when in reality, it’s among the most deeply flawed experiences I’ve encountered. What’s most frustrating is the mishandling of serious subject matter. It’s not just disappointing; it’s offensive to see such weighty themes treated with so little care. Please do better.

i started playing this for shits and giggles but OMG IT WAS SO EMOTIONAL AND GOOD??? LIKE HELLOOOOOO?  THE ART WAS SPLENDIFEROUS AND IT WAS SO WELL WRITTEN

i am starting this comment three minutes after playing through in one hour long sitting, because gods i can’t not comment on this. 

first of all; art? gorgeous. writing? beyond phenomenal. everything about it just spoke to me, made me feel things, and stood out. i’m struggling with words because of how much i want to say, but can’t articulate. i'll try my best, though.

i’ve never reached quite the low of having a plan to end my own life, but i’ve gotten close to that point. reading through this, every devastating moment, and every wonderful moment, was so real to me. and i loved everything about it. i’ve had the experience of finding someone to love who helps you love yourself by wanting to be there for them, by wanting to help them get better, seeing the self destructive behaviors in them, and realizing how bad it is, and realizing you want to help them, which, in turn, helps you. it was not a romantic love for me, but it’s a roller coaster no matter what. i understand relapses (though not with drugs or alcohol, but other destructive things), and gods... it’s so hard. it’s awful watching someone else do it. even harder when you want to be there for them, and worse when it makes you feel a need to relapse too. 

however, reading through this, getting to the end, was a hard reminder i personally really needed right now that things do get better. things can look up. healing takes time, and it’s not linear in the slightest. it felt like this was exactly what i needed to read right now. exactly what i needed to see. exactly the experience and reminder i needed. to continue, to look up, and to remind myself to respect me, along with caring deeply for those i love. and to punch shitty people (this part is a joke)

everything about this was beautiful. everything about this was Perfect in it’s  fucked up package of highs and lows. it hits so hard, and in such a painfully wonderful way. thank you for making this. 

I've just finished your game and OMG!!! Thank you for doing it <3 I've been playing during all night and I couldn't stop until I finished it! WOOOW